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SweetpeaAeryn
10-13-2003, 03:42 PM
I wrote this paper for my rhetoric class... please read it and let me know if there are any questions, comments, or criticisms...

THanks a ton!!! :)

ETA: It's about popular sci-fi and explaining it to professors so that they can better understand their students.
Silk
10-13-2003, 04:07 PM
I don't have time to read it now, but I will, and get back to you!:D
grinner
10-13-2003, 04:13 PM
Originally posted by SweetpeaAeryn
Yet, after two seasons it was cancelled because the demographic was in the 18-24 year old range, which at the time was undesirable. Now, ironically, that is the desired demographic and this is the age group that is drawn to the genre today. are you sure about this range? From what I have read in the Network News sub-forum... Science Fiction shows skew older... the 24-59 range.
SweetpeaAeryn
10-13-2003, 07:47 PM
Is it ok to bump my own thread?

:bump:
NYPinTA
10-14-2003, 12:39 PM
I just finished reading it. Easy to read yet not meandering. :aok:
I do have one suggestion about this part:
"The new Star Wars trilogy, parts one through three, although not as popular as the first trilogy, are still immensely popular."

That could be arguable since Episodes I, II, III made so much money. ( I don't know if they made MORE than the original three, but I am sure someone knows that or where you could find that out.) Instead of saying it that way, you could say something like: "The new Star Wars trilogy, although not as universally loved by the fans of the original still made..." blah blah blah amount of dollars at the box office. You know, throw in some figures. Teachers love figures.
Kurt_eh
10-14-2003, 12:44 PM
And if you want figures, there aint no better movie $$$ website than

http://www.boxofficemojo.com/
SweetpeaAeryn
10-14-2003, 03:50 PM
Thanks for the helpful suggestions!!! :)
SweetpeaAeryn
11-16-2003, 11:31 AM
Here's my final version. :)
Third EYe
11-16-2003, 12:19 PM
Good paper, but you should have had BH chocking on some sort of black bird or something.

Very well thought out and you stayed with something you know.
SweetpeaAeryn
11-16-2003, 12:28 PM
Originally posted by Third EYe
Good paper, but you should have had BH chocking on some sort of black bird or something.

Very well thought out and you stayed with something you know.

Yeah, I didn't like that the quote came from BH, but I liked what it said, and it reinforced my point.

Thanks for the feedback. :)